Chiyo posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 2:11pm

If there isnt a sequel in the works to this I'll be most most upset.

That was without a doubt one of the best fanfics with a Harry/Tonks relationship I've ever read. And probably up there with some of my favorites period. I love the way you wrote their characters... everyones characters really.

Only critique I might make is the wording you had them do/say. Almost too proper and you seldom ever used contractions as most people would talk... using I am instead of I'm. Things like that. Nothing too major just didnt flow dialogue wise as smooth as it might would have otherwise.

Other than that... AWESOME story!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 1:34pm

I am even more amazed with your training of Harry to be better prepared to lead and fight from so many perspectives.

Excellent work.

harryjerry posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 1:29pm

SEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL ect...awesome job!!!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 11:57am

The confrontation at the Order meeting on Harry's place of residence was well orchestrated. Wonderful dialogue.

I love you Odd Lovegood.

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 11:27am

You wrote a terrific discussion betweeen Horace and Harry about how and why Harry was not going Dark.

The Fudge sacking was choice.

Great stuff!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 10:36am

This was a great line:
"Look Uncle, no wand."

The final confrontation with Vernon was a great moment. Physical pain may be the only thing Dursley really understands.

The way Harry handled McGonagall and Molly, and the way Tonks handled Moody were classics.

Potter Manor - "Home where I belong." Three cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 5:13am

The "Kobyoshi Maru" scenario in the first of the chapter was brill. It was a very viable no-win test that made great sense how and when it occurred in Harry's training cycle.

You've developed one of my all time favorite "get-rid-of-Fudge" campaigns. I'm scheming mine over time and hope it will be nearly as effect as yours.

The Order meeting went well. Dumbledore and Harry are fighting apart and setting themselves up to slowly come back together to a degree.

Wonderful Snape bashing.

A good time was had by all!

Amamama posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 2:53am

I find this an interesting story I enjoy reading, but you really should have a beta to check your spelling and grammar. And Tonks is Bella's niece, not her cousin...

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 28th January 2007 2:39am

The potential for significant goblin interaction is well set up in canon, but it looks like little will come of it in Book 7 - just too much else to deal with.

You, however, have used this goblin potential in a very unique way, and I greatly enjoy it.

Harry finding out he was truly loved by his parents, and the immediate difference it makes in him is a very realistic reaction to the events.

Just excellent!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 10:09pm

Most post=OotP stories have Harry back in good stead with Dumbledore too soon or they have an insurmountable breach.

I know you do a fine job of showing the breach but allowing it to be healed slowly and realistically.

Great Chappie.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 12:40pm

The Sirius will reading is such a grand opportunity to do things with the Potterverse, and you did not disappoint. I particularly liked the conversation between Harry and Narcissa - family heirlooms in trade for a "date" with Bella. Great stuff!

And of course, Fudge bashing is always fun, and you gave Harry a generous chance and let him swing away.

A delightful chapter was had by all.

Wolfric posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 11:43am

I just read your story again and I enjoyed it a great deal. I hope there is a sequel in the works, I would love to see your take on Harry defeating Voldemort and manipulating the wizarding world. Thanks for your wonderful effort. W

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 7:57am

It is fascinating how you weave your theories regarding how magic works into Harry's training and other events in this story. Your development of the 'official' Unspeakables training curriculum is also well done.

I am not a big fan of quickly forming relationships, though one done logically and explained well can work for me. Yours does in spades.

Great Tale!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 6:35am

The practical working out of your theories of magic during Harry's shield training was an excellent piece of explanatory writing

Horace is the positive version of Snape - you love to hate him but you learn, and you'll eventually like him in spite of himself.

Fine chapter all around.

Donald McLeod posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 4:43am

Nice set up for school. But is Narcissa looking to for a way out or revege for killind her sister? Great chapter, thank you for the update.

ichtys posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 1:54am

Hi. I read and enjoyed this story. Great work. I look forward to read more of your stories here at FFA.
Regards Ichtys.

Padfoot posted a comment on Friday 26th January 2007 3:42pm

*Cheers*
This fic was amazing. Absolutely brilliant. Your plotlines and characterizations held me to the edge of my seat the entire time. The HONKS was believable and not overly cheesy. I'm a Harmonian myself but I could really see Harry's love for Tonks towards the end. Very well done. I will do as most of the others and plead for a sequel. If nothing else than to point out that the only bone to pick is the ending. It almost seems like you ended mid thought. Granted this was a summer fic and summer is over so I guess you could call it closed. But you opened up too many plotlines for this to be a standalone fic. You should either leave an authors note or an explination on your front page as I'm sure every person that finished this story is doing the same thing I am and going 'WHA?' Other than that this is by far a great fic and I look forward to seeing your future work in, well, the future.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Friday 26th January 2007 1:21pm

I loved this line:
"Come on, Mr. Happy. Let’s get your positive personality to our meeting." Great bit is snide yet jesting commentary.

The test was a grand bit of battle writing. Just great work all around. The Horace and Marcus characters are wonderfully set up and starting to be fleshed out.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Friday 26th January 2007 11:19am

I am not sure I can really see Occlumency as something one can learn substantially in one sitting, even though Harry had all of Snape's bad teaching to show him how not to do it.

However, your process of Harry picking up most of the fundamentals in one burst is probably the best, all-at-once I've read. Very well done, that.

The scenes with Vernon build very well and are realistic within context.

A great read.

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Friday 26th January 2007 10:33am

This was a brilliant fic. Maybe now that I've finally finished reading it, I can get some more sleep.
Here's hoping for a sequel!!